Student Poetry Competition 2024: Year 5-6 Winners

From icy snowflakes to the great salmon swim, our winning poems in the Year 5–6 category evoke some of the ephemeral wonders of the world.

Congratulations to Emily Lam (Presbyterian Ladies’ College), Zaid Zuhair (Fitra Community School), Haley Cheong (Harkaway Hills College), Naushali Navaratne (Harkaway Hills College) and all of those who received honourable mentions.

 

The competition attracted over 850 entries from students in Foundation to Year 12 across all school sectors in Victoria.

Written poetry winners
‘A delightful account of awe that warms your heart and arouses the senses.’
The Meaning of Awe
Emily Lam, Presbyterian Ladies' College

My friend, you ask
what is the meaning of awe?
where must I go to find it?
My friend, try the dictionary if you wish
but you’ll not find it there.
Don’t you know
a book is more than its cover?
a word is more than its definition?
My friend, I will show you
awe
as it is for me
after all, sorry is that person
who has lived their life
without feeling
that moment that takes their breath away
that beauty that is pain.
You ask- is it the Niagara Falls?
The Sistine Chapel?
My friend, yes, for some that would be true,
But for me, awe resides in the quietest of moments-
in infinite places if you know where to look.
Now, for sunset, there’s no better place
than the Murray River
bobbing softly, languorously, on the deck of a moored houseboat.
My friend, feel those colours-
clouds veiled in soft dove-grey with hints of violet hues
clouds delicately edged in palest pink, clouds gowned in cloaks of peachy amber
clouds rolling across the sky in great swathes and puffs of cotton wool, their soft grey and white shot through with arrows and lances of fiery gold, pillowed on cushions of crimson-drink it all in-
and can you see the circling silhouettes of wheeling birds serenading the sun,
disporting themselves in the last gift of his light and warmth?
Oh, my friend,
just see it, watch as the clouds dispel and fold away their finery for another evening, feel it with all of your heart-
that is all I ask.
My friend,
we’ll stay here
till the coolness of dusk sets in
and watch as the quiet sky
changes softly, tentatively, from golden silk into black velvet.
Lift up your head now,
greet the stars as one by one she pins them
on her dress to replace her evening glory
They speckle the inky sky now,
wonderful, ethereal, gazing at a
million little diamonds of light
and a pale, milky moon that she wears on a chain around her neck.
My friend, you still can’t say what awe is?
To tell the truth, my friend, neither can I.
Awe must be felt with the heart, mind and soul-
and if they know it, there is no need for any words
to describe it,
just experience it and enjoy-
that is more than enough.

‘Clear, yet evocative language, allowing the reader to be fully plunged into the life of a salmon.’
The Salmon Swim
Zaid Zuhair, Fitra Community School

One ocean

Far and vast

One fish

Small and vulnerable

More join

Tens

Hundreds

Thousands

They’re off

The school

the swarm

Driven by instinct

They swim

Home

Where it all began

Closer, they come

The river at last

They approach

Wary

A shadow advances

Hungry

A paw slices the water

Jaws snap

Scales fly

Crimson water

Not all survive

One life lost

Yet tens

Hundreds

Thousands, continue

Generations come to pass

Eggs become ancestors

The cycle repeats

‘A wonderful example of a short and seamless poem.’
Snowflakes
Haley Cheong, Harkaway Hills College

Who made the snowflake?
This one here on my glove.
This beautiful phenomenon,
A purely ice inspired one.

 

Each inch and every corner,
An intricate masterpiece.
Each miraculous and tiny,
Every flake is so unique.

Performance poetry winner
In Awe of Her Love
Naushali Navaratne, Harkaway Hills College
Honourable mentions

Written poetry

  • Meike Chow, Tintern Grammar – Tomorrow
  • Brooklyn Clarke, Tintern Grammar – The Tortures of Hate
  • Anton Dean, St Paul’s Anglican Grammar School – The Snowball Effect
  • Ruhaabir Dhillon, Southern Cross Grammar – Minecraft: A Thrilling Adventure
  • Jacinta Elvin, St Michael’s Grammar School – Just Any Other Owl
  • Teddy Fang, Fitzroy Community School – Waterfall
  • Henry Fulton, Tintern Grammar – Nuclear
  • Felicity Hack, Harkaway Hills College – My Frail Butterfly
  • Mia Healey, Strathcona Girls School – Wonder
  • Rex Locket, St Paul’s Anglican Grammar School – Metal Birds
  • Emily Lo Doherty, Lauriston Girls’ School – Animal Instincts
  • Florence McKay, Ivanhoe Girls’ Grammar School Awe
  • Clarissa Ma, Ivanhoe Girls’ Grammar SchoolAwe
  • Ibraheem Mohamed, Fitra Community School – Awe
  • Oliver Moran, Wesley College – Melbourne Morning
  • Sophie Pham, Lauriston Girls’ School – This is Awe
  • Kate Riding, Covenant College – Mackie
  • Lola Rowe, St Paul’s Anglican Grammar School – Blue
  • Shahini Silva, Harkaway Hills College – Wonders
  • Sofia So, Ballarat Clarendon College – My Dog
  • Reuben Stringer, Wesley College – Quokka’s Question
  • Angela Teng, Lauriston Girls’ School – Fire
  • Claire Tian, Lauriston Girls’ School – Flying
  • Raphael van Strijp, Lysterfield Lake College – Coral Bay in Western Australia
  • Thomas Vittas, Flinders Christian Community College – Ran
  • Charlotte Xia, Ivanhoe Girls’ Grammar School – Awe, The Seasons
  • Sumayya Zuhair, Fitra Community School – The Red Panda

Performance poetry

  • Noah Ha, Kilvington Grammar School – The Cycle of Awe
  • Aya Mariam, Australian International Academy – Joy and Happiness
  • Vraamarsh Punati, Southern Cross Grammar – Awesome Melbourne
  • Samuel Sun, Wesley College – Like Before